Nian Nu Jiao, Song of the Good Man of Chlorophosphorus
Hydrogen, helium, lithium, beryllium — will chlorophosphorus, directly ignite a thousand sparks. Milling and filing without skill arise anew, sworn to exhaust the azure dragon.
At the place of fireworks smoke, unwilling to rise again. Exalting quark atoms, commanding soldiers with banners, how could they compare to the noble Zhuge Liang of yesteryears?
The cold mirror encroaching upon the courtyard, moon reflecting, lower brow, singing. Where to seek the past shadow? Clumsy poetry and careless tunes are nearly finished, long tears soak the garment’s collar.
Gentle wind unrolls clouds, the starry river speaks to the eye, finally returning to the vast cold.
Re-light the star lamps, talk at night about Mountain Ba’s night rain.
Note: This is a poem written by Qian Ren in memory of Marx, Lenin, Mao, and the群众（mass movement）stopping updates.
To be honest, from both a political and artistic perspective, this poem has nothing commendable.
First, I don’t know what you mean by the so-called Marxist-Leninist-Maoist masses. I don’t understand, so I can’t definitively say that commemorating is impossible. However, if you want to commemorate, you should clarify what you are commemorating and why, so that everyone understands. But neither your poem itself nor your final notes explain this issue. Therefore, in terms of politics, this poem does not indicate whom it serves. If the content promoted in the so-called “Marxist-Leninist-Maoist masses” (since it’s discontinued, it might be a publication) is not truly Marxist, the impact could be very wrong.
Second, from an artistic point of view, it lacks rhyme schemes and tonal patterns. Chairman Mao advocated that “poetry should primarily be in new poetry,” but there is no problem in writing classical poetry as well. Similarly, writing classical poetry does not require strict adherence to specific metrics. However, since you use words that seem to have literary flavor, not adhering to the rhythmic rules is somewhat confusing. It only makes people think that you are pretending to be knowledgeable, pretentious, “forcing sorrow into new words.”
Finally, instead of spending time writing these poems, it would be better to read “The Path of Future Revolution in China,” “Guide to Ideological Struggle,” and past issues of “Dawn,” to answer your own questions and enrich your mind with Marxism.
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You have repeatedly posted irrelevant posts like this, and other members have spent their effort replying to each one. Do you not realize that your behavior has already violated the forum rules?
Hello comrade, the reason I didn’t realize it as you mentioned is because the dominant passion, personified by me, has defeated the sacred and inviolable, materialized rules that you uphold.
It’s you so-called literary figures and scholars who support the Chinese fascist government, causing the deaths of countless Chinese workers, farmers, and students. How can you have the audacity to say such words?
Are you talking about a patriot-selling traitor like Hu Lancheng? Or are you referring to a female scoundrel and disgusting rogue like Ding Ling? Do you admire such people?
“Chlorine Phosphorus Hero” is probably referring to “Green Forest Heroes,” right? If it’s meant to symbolize workers, that’s too far-fetched. Why use chemical element reactions? There’s no scientific abstraction of the working class. I don’t know if you’ve operated a milling machine, but those can’t cut people; they’re like grinders, and so are files. Using “slay” afterward feels very out of place.
And what about “quark atoms”? Not sure if you’re talking about some “social atomism,” but referencing that and Zhou Yu together feels disconnected. Is Zhou Yu commanding an atomic army? It doesn’t show any internal connection.
This segment’s style suddenly changes. Earlier, it was about chlorine, phosphorus, quark atoms, and now the language style is completely different. Moreover, these words and quotes often relate to love, personal sorrow, and autumn melancholy. Your style shifts so drastically, and the content is abstract; it’s hard to tell if you’re trying to convey new meanings or what.